Elinor Thieme
Friday, January 6, 2012
I need help with my story! 10 points!?
Well just one suggestion. You shouldn't use disgraced to describe the father. That would mean he had done something to be ashamed of. You should use something like disgusted, appalled, revolted or dismayed
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